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maderrBought an anthology last night. One of the short stories...oh, heck, let's go get the official summary...
And really, it's more amusing than anything.
Lust in the Afternoon by Cian Fey
Sometimes all it takes is one afternoon.
Ted Wayne is the IT manager at a gay online magazine and bookstore that also provides live streaming peep shows. During a fierce snowstorm, the on-air talent can't make it in for the "Lust in the Afternoon" show, and only Ted is around to fill the void.
Art director Grayson Jeffries talks Ted into fifteen minutes in front of the camera, Ted agrees partly because he thinks Gray is the hottest thing going. He's reluctant to masturbate in front of Gray, but at least with Gray in the room, he has no worries about getting it up.
Gray has wanted Ted for months - now he has this one chance to make all his fantasies come true.
The story was cute. Nothing totally prize, but it was all right. Until the end, where there is a random ass fucking epilogue where the boss of this place winds up being a fae or something, and he magically used the blizzard to hook the two guys up. This would have worked if there had been any indication of this crap throughout the story. Mayhap this story is from some larger verse, and it makes sense; I have not yet checked in to that. But, overall, it seemed WTF and utterly pointless. To those who will be getting the antho from me, skip the epilogue on this particular story. It worked just fine without the epilogue. She could have even had the boss purposely hooking them up. It's the magic element that completely threw me. Maye I just missed something.
Honestly, though, I place a large majority of the blame here on the beta. Any good editor worthy of being called thus should have said hack the epilogue. It was pointless, not needed, and dragged the story down. An author can be forgiven these mishaps, to some degree. Being close to the story, sometimes we miss the obvious. But when my beta says cut it, I cut it. Honestly, editing is becoming a lost art, imho.
In other news, my brother and mother finally snared me into reading the Sword of Truth series. Luckily, I do actually like the MC and his chick, for all the zomg I'm in love seems more than a tad rushed. But, it always is in fantasy. I don't think I really know a fantasy writer who can write a good romance. By the same token, however, a romance writer does not typically write zomg fantasy. The emphasis cannot be on everything at once.
All right, should probably work on food and resume editing DwtD. I need that done before I can put up it and Midnight.
And Leverage is on tonight!
And really, it's more amusing than anything.
Lust in the Afternoon by Cian Fey
Sometimes all it takes is one afternoon.
Ted Wayne is the IT manager at a gay online magazine and bookstore that also provides live streaming peep shows. During a fierce snowstorm, the on-air talent can't make it in for the "Lust in the Afternoon" show, and only Ted is around to fill the void.
Art director Grayson Jeffries talks Ted into fifteen minutes in front of the camera, Ted agrees partly because he thinks Gray is the hottest thing going. He's reluctant to masturbate in front of Gray, but at least with Gray in the room, he has no worries about getting it up.
Gray has wanted Ted for months - now he has this one chance to make all his fantasies come true.
The story was cute. Nothing totally prize, but it was all right. Until the end, where there is a random ass fucking epilogue where the boss of this place winds up being a fae or something, and he magically used the blizzard to hook the two guys up. This would have worked if there had been any indication of this crap throughout the story. Mayhap this story is from some larger verse, and it makes sense; I have not yet checked in to that. But, overall, it seemed WTF and utterly pointless. To those who will be getting the antho from me, skip the epilogue on this particular story. It worked just fine without the epilogue. She could have even had the boss purposely hooking them up. It's the magic element that completely threw me. Maye I just missed something.
Honestly, though, I place a large majority of the blame here on the beta. Any good editor worthy of being called thus should have said hack the epilogue. It was pointless, not needed, and dragged the story down. An author can be forgiven these mishaps, to some degree. Being close to the story, sometimes we miss the obvious. But when my beta says cut it, I cut it. Honestly, editing is becoming a lost art, imho.
In other news, my brother and mother finally snared me into reading the Sword of Truth series. Luckily, I do actually like the MC and his chick, for all the zomg I'm in love seems more than a tad rushed. But, it always is in fantasy. I don't think I really know a fantasy writer who can write a good romance. By the same token, however, a romance writer does not typically write zomg fantasy. The emphasis cannot be on everything at once.
All right, should probably work on food and resume editing DwtD. I need that done before I can put up it and Midnight.
And Leverage is on tonight!
