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maderrCertain thing about this story grate, but then the author does something clever, or proves she put some effort into the research, and I like to keepy at it. Then I get lines like this, and I totally want to keep at it:
Jack rolled onto his stomach and clutched a pillow over his head. Sure, no problem.Testify against some drug lords. All in a day’s work. Get a new name and get yourself relocated thousands of miles away. No sweat. Assassins coming after you? Check. Conscience-ridden hit men spiriting you away? Check. Hiding out in a remote cabin? Oh, got that one covered. Develop unseemly crush on ruthless hired killer?
Jack sighed. I am one incurable illness away from a Lifetime Movie of the Week.
~Zero at the Bone, by Jane Seville
I am 70-ish pages in and right now the only thing really irking me is the one guy's accent. First rule of accents: Establish it in the first couple of pages, then stop doing it. If you establish it quickly and well, the reader will hear it no matter how you type. It is really fucking annoying to constantly read all the mispelled words and crap. Other than touches of 'I like Emily Dickinson and other important persons" the book is not bad. And the above quote is fucking hilarious.
oh, yeah. it's an ebook, from, uh, dreamspinner press, I think.
Jack rolled onto his stomach and clutched a pillow over his head. Sure, no problem.Testify against some drug lords. All in a day’s work. Get a new name and get yourself relocated thousands of miles away. No sweat. Assassins coming after you? Check. Conscience-ridden hit men spiriting you away? Check. Hiding out in a remote cabin? Oh, got that one covered. Develop unseemly crush on ruthless hired killer?
Jack sighed. I am one incurable illness away from a Lifetime Movie of the Week.
~Zero at the Bone, by Jane Seville
I am 70-ish pages in and right now the only thing really irking me is the one guy's accent. First rule of accents: Establish it in the first couple of pages, then stop doing it. If you establish it quickly and well, the reader will hear it no matter how you type. It is really fucking annoying to constantly read all the mispelled words and crap. Other than touches of 'I like Emily Dickinson and other important persons" the book is not bad. And the above quote is fucking hilarious.
oh, yeah. it's an ebook, from, uh, dreamspinner press, I think.
