I give up

I have tried and tried to make this story work. To like it. It's not working. I hate it.

At some later point, when I can stand to look at it, I may just cannabalize the bits I like (namely, Jasmine and Chanda) and make a story about them. I like them. The rest of it reeks of trying too hard, I don't care what my beta says. I wanted it to be a cool foursome story and it's just 33 pages of pretty drivel.

Blah. I hate when I lose.

Am only posting because goddamn it, I tried, and I refuse to let 33 pages of hard work vanish entirely. In two posts, obviously. Normally I'd pester Sammikins to tell me what's wrong but b) she's busy enough as is and 9) I know what's wrong - it flat out sucks.

Boo hiss I say.

( so if you're bored, here we go. pretty drivel section one. )

pretty drivel section two

I apologize for the abrupt cut off. I seriously just finally got sick of it. kitty assures me it's good - but I'm firmly set in the suckage.

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I die dead

NOT WORK SAFE

Ganked from pleasance, had to share ^___^ Don't know who all has already seen it.


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