And Twenty /spamming
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maderrAnd after this things get waaaay more complicated for me, to sort out and wrap up and blargh. *note to self - no more political crap*
Chapter Twenty
Planet 00000000 (Zero), Alexander Private Estate
His robes flapped and rustled as he walked rapidly back to the room where Cyan was being kept, refusing to run. "It's not going to work. Fools." He examined the hallway carefully before stepping up to the keypad and rapidly punching in the code. He stepped inside, relaxing slightly as he took in Cyan, still out cold on the bed.
"No surprise there, really. Now where are the little bastards?"
"Try behind you, Boss."
Jade went still, then slowly turned around - as Einn dropped from the ceiling. "Well, well. The rock-spider lives. I'm not surprised really - everyone else lived through it. Val and his explosions, tsk tsk."
"Yeah, he does rather suck at them." Einn agreed shortly, stunner in hand and pointed at Jade.
And what are you going to do with that? Knock me out and then carry my idiot brother off? That's universally foolish. You do that and I'll just wake up and come after you."
"No, you won't. Because we have your men, and your ship - that being the one you took from me - and a world of evidence against you."
"So you've joined ranks with the rebels, hmm? How quaint. But tell me this - what's to stop me from killing the little spy you have at the lab? Hmm? The one you can't find. Did I mention I'm the only one who knows its location? And what about the mutant's poor, poor mother. By the time you get there or send a warning, I'll have already given the order to have her killed. And she's already so sick, it wouldn't take much."
Jade smirked, "And all that aside - stunners won't work in here. The room's been rigged to nullify their effects. It is my brother I kidnapped, after all. So if you want to knock me out, do try. But I assure you that you'll regret it. And unlike my dear brother, you won't be waking up after I finish with you."
"Whatever." Einn holstered his stunner aside in disgust.
"You should have just stayed my obedient little pirate."
"I was never yours. I was never little. And I was barely obedient," Einn returned. "Why in the hell did you drag us into this?"
"I?" Jade looked innocent. "It's not my fault my idiotic brother decided to scamper off to tell a friend about his sick mother, nor my fault his friend turned out to be the mutant I've been trying to find for the past Term. If Cyan had kept to his tendency to hide away in that prison of his and ignore the rest of the world, all three of us would be much happier."
"Much more sane, anyway," Einn muttered. "So what do we do now? Stand here and chat all day?"
"No. I'd much rather just kill you and get back to business. I knew you'd turn out to be a problem."
"You can't just kill me."
"Can't I?" Jade asked, smirking. "You're just a lousy pirate, in the end. One who kidnapped my brother, who turned out to be your cohort and a jilted lover - that was quite the fight I hear. I was disappointed Cyan kept me from seeing it. He came here to hide from you, but you tracked him down and voila - a fight leads to two tragic deaths. And the last of my family dead, after turning traitor. It will be too much for me to bear, really." He sneered, "So very tragic. Who would suspect me of anything after that? Really, this is turning out to be rather convenient after all."
"You forget we still have your ship - my ship - and men hostage."
"So I inform them that the Dragonfly is the pirate ship they've been hunting for awhile. If it accidentally explodes while it's resisting?" Jade shrugged, "Getting myself out of trouble is second nature."
"Bottom dweller," Einn said in disgust. "You really are a conniving bastard - even more of one than I thought. I am heartily sick and tired of Alexanders. You're a conniving, back-stabbing bastard who got hit upside the head with one too many rocks, and you're brother took my heart and shred it to pieces. Just what in the hell is all this for anyway? Just so you can use magics?"
"Has my little brother become a heartbreaker, then? Mother always said he would, he was so charming as a little boy."
"I got what I deserved, no thanks to you. Now if we're done chatting, I'd prefer to just take him and go. I really don't give a fuck about the rest. I'm just a pirate, this crap is way out of my league."
"Please - you're the one who just called me a conniving bastard. And I've already said I'm going to kill you."
"No, no - the conniving bastard bit I stole from Cyan."
"I thought the words sounded familiar," Jade said with forced patience, "He does like to call me that. But be that as it may - no one is leaving this room alive except for me."
"I still don't think you'll come out of it with your reputation clean. Too much mischief in one area always causes trouble."
Jade smoothed his robes, "You underestimate me. I've made a career out of making others take the blame for my schemes," He smiled nastily, "You should know all about that. And seeing as you're alive, you still owe me quite a bit of money, don't you? Or did you think I'd forgotten all about that? Not that it will matter - you're going to be dead soon. But I'll wait until you're talked out. Or at least until I get bored." Jade paused, as if something had just occurred to him, "How in the stars did you get past my security?"
Einn grinned, "I'm Fornarian - sensors don't read levels as low as mine. You should work on that. Second - I'm magics capable. This stupid house didn't account for that either. At least, not my type of magics."
"But my house is guarded against magics - a wide variety of them. Including some of your abilities, like the tendency to stick to things."
"Yeah - but I bet you hadn't accounted for magics that have tripled in power. I'm starting to appreciate the benefits of being stuck with a Draconis."
Jade hissed. "That problem will be remedied the minute I've finished with you," he snarled, even as he reached with blinding speed for the knife in his robes--
--Only to be halted by a hand gripping his wrist, and spun around to meet his brother's fist. Jade stumbled back, holding a hand to his shattered nose - then crumbled as Einn finished the job and sent him tumbling to the ground. He looked up at Cyan.
Cyan kicked his brother in the side, glowering. He looked at Einn, "I told you so."
Einn sighed.
Cyan stepped around his brother's body to stand almost toe-to-toe with the tall Fornarian, tilting his head back to stare up at him.
Einn tensed, forcing away any signs of his misery and worry of the past several days from his face. "Ready to go? Or would you prefer to call a shuttle?"
For answer, Cyan reached up to tangle his hand in Einn's hair and dragged him down into a hard, bruising, kiss. He was still glaring when broke away, "If you lie to me again, I'll beat you to the point my prisoners will think I've been going easy on them.
"R-right."
"And you're still in trouble," Cyan stated before kissing him again, this one softer and almost desperate.
"Not that I'm complaining," Einn said eventually. "But shouldn't we be getting a move on?" He looked down at the top of Cyan's head, as the man had buried himself against his chest and hugging Einn tightly.
He couldn't understand what Cyan said in reply, "What?"
Cyan looked up, "I thought you were dead."
"What?!" Einn said, horrified. "That fucking bottom dweller!" he glared at Jade, still crumpled on the floor in a mass of black, pink and gold.
"Never mind for now." Cyan reluctantly pulled away. "Let's get out of here. We have to hurry, before he wakes up."
"No, we don't." Einn said, smirking. "Though I agree we should get out of this room." Still holding onto Cyan, he led them out of the bedroom. "Know how to lock this so he can't get out?"
"Yeah," Cyan took Einn's stunner from its holster and slammed it down hard against the console, jumping back as sparks showered everywhere.
"Hey!" Einn howled in protest. "I just bought that."
Cyan looked it over carefully, then aimed it down the hallway and fired. "It still works," he replaced it in its holster and smiled briefly. "So what's this plan of yours?"
Einn ignored the question, distracted by the wounds on Cyan's face, neck and arm. "What in the hell has he been doing to you?"
"Using me as a scratching post," Cyan responded dryly. "Used to be his favorite thing to do, when mom and dad weren't around. Back then, he had to be a lot smarter about where he clawed me." He touched the marks on his cheek, smiling ruefully. "I guess these days he doesn't have to worry about being punished."
"Hmm…" Einn pulled his hand away and ducked his head to press soft kisses to the marks on his cheek, "I hope you left a few marks on him."
"Not really, no." Cyan pulled away, ashamed. "I'm pretty good at beating prisoners up - not so much Jade. It's hard to one-up my first teacher, and…"
"And?"
Cyan shrugged, "And he's my brother? As much as I want to hurt him, I don't. Want to hurt him, that is."
"I see," Einn smiled. "I guess that's what makes you the likeable brother. Though I did like seeing you smash his nose. I've been wanting to do that for years."
"Yes," Cyan narrowed his eyes. "We still need to discuss your working for him, at some point."
"Can't it wait?"
"For now," Cyan agreed. "But not forever."
Einn laughed, "Yeah, don't worry. If you're actually going to listen this time - who am I to complain?"
Cyan looked abashed. "I--"
But his words were cut off by Einn's lips, as the Fornarian kissed him warmly. "Come on," he said softly when he finally broke away. "If we don't hurry up, Faller and Karmikel will kill me."
"You just live to get yourself in trouble don't you?"
"It keeps life interesting, that's for sure. But I think maybe after this I'm going to try staying out of trouble for a bit." He took Cyan's hand and began leading him down the hall.
Cyan snorted, "I'll believe that when I see it." He increased his pace so that he wouldn't wind up being dragged, "Would you slow down?"
"Huh?"
"I don't have your spider legs. Either slow down or let me go so I can jog beside you."
"Oh, sorry." Einn slowed down enough that Cyan could keep pace with, refusing to let go of the hand clasped in his own.
"Where are headed?" Cyan asked.
"The others should be waiting for us in the comm center. Hopefully we can begin to wrap things up. But we'll see."
"Sounds like I've missed quite a bit of fun."
"Something like that."
Chapter Twenty
Planet 00000000 (Zero), Alexander Private Estate
His robes flapped and rustled as he walked rapidly back to the room where Cyan was being kept, refusing to run. "It's not going to work. Fools." He examined the hallway carefully before stepping up to the keypad and rapidly punching in the code. He stepped inside, relaxing slightly as he took in Cyan, still out cold on the bed.
"No surprise there, really. Now where are the little bastards?"
"Try behind you, Boss."
Jade went still, then slowly turned around - as Einn dropped from the ceiling. "Well, well. The rock-spider lives. I'm not surprised really - everyone else lived through it. Val and his explosions, tsk tsk."
"Yeah, he does rather suck at them." Einn agreed shortly, stunner in hand and pointed at Jade.
And what are you going to do with that? Knock me out and then carry my idiot brother off? That's universally foolish. You do that and I'll just wake up and come after you."
"No, you won't. Because we have your men, and your ship - that being the one you took from me - and a world of evidence against you."
"So you've joined ranks with the rebels, hmm? How quaint. But tell me this - what's to stop me from killing the little spy you have at the lab? Hmm? The one you can't find. Did I mention I'm the only one who knows its location? And what about the mutant's poor, poor mother. By the time you get there or send a warning, I'll have already given the order to have her killed. And she's already so sick, it wouldn't take much."
Jade smirked, "And all that aside - stunners won't work in here. The room's been rigged to nullify their effects. It is my brother I kidnapped, after all. So if you want to knock me out, do try. But I assure you that you'll regret it. And unlike my dear brother, you won't be waking up after I finish with you."
"Whatever." Einn holstered his stunner aside in disgust.
"You should have just stayed my obedient little pirate."
"I was never yours. I was never little. And I was barely obedient," Einn returned. "Why in the hell did you drag us into this?"
"I?" Jade looked innocent. "It's not my fault my idiotic brother decided to scamper off to tell a friend about his sick mother, nor my fault his friend turned out to be the mutant I've been trying to find for the past Term. If Cyan had kept to his tendency to hide away in that prison of his and ignore the rest of the world, all three of us would be much happier."
"Much more sane, anyway," Einn muttered. "So what do we do now? Stand here and chat all day?"
"No. I'd much rather just kill you and get back to business. I knew you'd turn out to be a problem."
"You can't just kill me."
"Can't I?" Jade asked, smirking. "You're just a lousy pirate, in the end. One who kidnapped my brother, who turned out to be your cohort and a jilted lover - that was quite the fight I hear. I was disappointed Cyan kept me from seeing it. He came here to hide from you, but you tracked him down and voila - a fight leads to two tragic deaths. And the last of my family dead, after turning traitor. It will be too much for me to bear, really." He sneered, "So very tragic. Who would suspect me of anything after that? Really, this is turning out to be rather convenient after all."
"You forget we still have your ship - my ship - and men hostage."
"So I inform them that the Dragonfly is the pirate ship they've been hunting for awhile. If it accidentally explodes while it's resisting?" Jade shrugged, "Getting myself out of trouble is second nature."
"Bottom dweller," Einn said in disgust. "You really are a conniving bastard - even more of one than I thought. I am heartily sick and tired of Alexanders. You're a conniving, back-stabbing bastard who got hit upside the head with one too many rocks, and you're brother took my heart and shred it to pieces. Just what in the hell is all this for anyway? Just so you can use magics?"
"Has my little brother become a heartbreaker, then? Mother always said he would, he was so charming as a little boy."
"I got what I deserved, no thanks to you. Now if we're done chatting, I'd prefer to just take him and go. I really don't give a fuck about the rest. I'm just a pirate, this crap is way out of my league."
"Please - you're the one who just called me a conniving bastard. And I've already said I'm going to kill you."
"No, no - the conniving bastard bit I stole from Cyan."
"I thought the words sounded familiar," Jade said with forced patience, "He does like to call me that. But be that as it may - no one is leaving this room alive except for me."
"I still don't think you'll come out of it with your reputation clean. Too much mischief in one area always causes trouble."
Jade smoothed his robes, "You underestimate me. I've made a career out of making others take the blame for my schemes," He smiled nastily, "You should know all about that. And seeing as you're alive, you still owe me quite a bit of money, don't you? Or did you think I'd forgotten all about that? Not that it will matter - you're going to be dead soon. But I'll wait until you're talked out. Or at least until I get bored." Jade paused, as if something had just occurred to him, "How in the stars did you get past my security?"
Einn grinned, "I'm Fornarian - sensors don't read levels as low as mine. You should work on that. Second - I'm magics capable. This stupid house didn't account for that either. At least, not my type of magics."
"But my house is guarded against magics - a wide variety of them. Including some of your abilities, like the tendency to stick to things."
"Yeah - but I bet you hadn't accounted for magics that have tripled in power. I'm starting to appreciate the benefits of being stuck with a Draconis."
Jade hissed. "That problem will be remedied the minute I've finished with you," he snarled, even as he reached with blinding speed for the knife in his robes--
--Only to be halted by a hand gripping his wrist, and spun around to meet his brother's fist. Jade stumbled back, holding a hand to his shattered nose - then crumbled as Einn finished the job and sent him tumbling to the ground. He looked up at Cyan.
Cyan kicked his brother in the side, glowering. He looked at Einn, "I told you so."
Einn sighed.
Cyan stepped around his brother's body to stand almost toe-to-toe with the tall Fornarian, tilting his head back to stare up at him.
Einn tensed, forcing away any signs of his misery and worry of the past several days from his face. "Ready to go? Or would you prefer to call a shuttle?"
For answer, Cyan reached up to tangle his hand in Einn's hair and dragged him down into a hard, bruising, kiss. He was still glaring when broke away, "If you lie to me again, I'll beat you to the point my prisoners will think I've been going easy on them.
"R-right."
"And you're still in trouble," Cyan stated before kissing him again, this one softer and almost desperate.
"Not that I'm complaining," Einn said eventually. "But shouldn't we be getting a move on?" He looked down at the top of Cyan's head, as the man had buried himself against his chest and hugging Einn tightly.
He couldn't understand what Cyan said in reply, "What?"
Cyan looked up, "I thought you were dead."
"What?!" Einn said, horrified. "That fucking bottom dweller!" he glared at Jade, still crumpled on the floor in a mass of black, pink and gold.
"Never mind for now." Cyan reluctantly pulled away. "Let's get out of here. We have to hurry, before he wakes up."
"No, we don't." Einn said, smirking. "Though I agree we should get out of this room." Still holding onto Cyan, he led them out of the bedroom. "Know how to lock this so he can't get out?"
"Yeah," Cyan took Einn's stunner from its holster and slammed it down hard against the console, jumping back as sparks showered everywhere.
"Hey!" Einn howled in protest. "I just bought that."
Cyan looked it over carefully, then aimed it down the hallway and fired. "It still works," he replaced it in its holster and smiled briefly. "So what's this plan of yours?"
Einn ignored the question, distracted by the wounds on Cyan's face, neck and arm. "What in the hell has he been doing to you?"
"Using me as a scratching post," Cyan responded dryly. "Used to be his favorite thing to do, when mom and dad weren't around. Back then, he had to be a lot smarter about where he clawed me." He touched the marks on his cheek, smiling ruefully. "I guess these days he doesn't have to worry about being punished."
"Hmm…" Einn pulled his hand away and ducked his head to press soft kisses to the marks on his cheek, "I hope you left a few marks on him."
"Not really, no." Cyan pulled away, ashamed. "I'm pretty good at beating prisoners up - not so much Jade. It's hard to one-up my first teacher, and…"
"And?"
Cyan shrugged, "And he's my brother? As much as I want to hurt him, I don't. Want to hurt him, that is."
"I see," Einn smiled. "I guess that's what makes you the likeable brother. Though I did like seeing you smash his nose. I've been wanting to do that for years."
"Yes," Cyan narrowed his eyes. "We still need to discuss your working for him, at some point."
"Can't it wait?"
"For now," Cyan agreed. "But not forever."
Einn laughed, "Yeah, don't worry. If you're actually going to listen this time - who am I to complain?"
Cyan looked abashed. "I--"
But his words were cut off by Einn's lips, as the Fornarian kissed him warmly. "Come on," he said softly when he finally broke away. "If we don't hurry up, Faller and Karmikel will kill me."
"You just live to get yourself in trouble don't you?"
"It keeps life interesting, that's for sure. But I think maybe after this I'm going to try staying out of trouble for a bit." He took Cyan's hand and began leading him down the hall.
Cyan snorted, "I'll believe that when I see it." He increased his pace so that he wouldn't wind up being dragged, "Would you slow down?"
"Huh?"
"I don't have your spider legs. Either slow down or let me go so I can jog beside you."
"Oh, sorry." Einn slowed down enough that Cyan could keep pace with, refusing to let go of the hand clasped in his own.
"Where are headed?" Cyan asked.
"The others should be waiting for us in the comm center. Hopefully we can begin to wrap things up. But we'll see."
"Sounds like I've missed quite a bit of fun."
"Something like that."
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Date: 2004-11-22 03:47 am (UTC)Still waiting for a damned hug however...
Good job on mostly reaching your goal though. I'd've given up and cried. It's what I usually do. I mean, look how long it took me to get one chapter of Bloodshot done.
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Date: 2004-11-22 05:19 am (UTC)And maybe I'll have to draw Jade, too <.
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Date: 2004-11-22 05:28 pm (UTC)Hee ^_^ I figured a few people would kind of sort of really like this chapter. Glad you approve!
And you drew him! Squee! I keep sneakng looks while I'm at work.
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Date: 2004-11-22 05:44 am (UTC)Missing the " in front there.
"Whatever." Einn holstered his stunner aside in disgust.
The "aside" makes the sentence a bit weird.
You're a conniving, back-stabbing bastard who got hit upside the head with one too many rocks, and you're brother took my heart and shred it to pieces. Just what in the hell is all this for anyway? Just so you can use magics?"
Bolded "you're" should be "your" there. Um, in the earlier bits you wrote "back stabbing" as two words, I think... I noticed it /somewhere/... You might want to check it out and pick one way of writing it to stick to? Also, should "shred" be "shredded"?
For answer, Cyan reached up to tangle his hand in Einn's hair and dragged him down into a hard, bruising, kiss. He was still glaring when [ ] broke away, "If you lie to me again, I'll beat you to the point [where] my prisoners will think I've been going easy on them.
"For answer" sounds a bit odd... Maybe "In answer"? And the bolded [ ]'s there should have either a "they" or a "he" I think. Although if you use "they", "broke apart" might be more appropriate. Missing a "where" there too.
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AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. *keels over giggling like an idiot* I love these two to BITS! XD
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He looked down at the top of Cyan's head, as the man had buried himself against his chest and [was] hugging Einn tightly.
Missing "was".
He couldn't understand what Cyan said in reply, "What?"
Cyan looked up, "I thought you were dead."
Fullstop instead of commas before both bits of dialogue, I think.
"What?!" Einn said, horrified. "That fucking bottom dweller!" he glared at Jade, still crumpled on the floor in a mass of black, pink and gold.
"He glared at Jade" should be a new sentence, so "he" should be "He"?
Cyan snorted, "I'll believe that when I see it." He increased his pace so that he wouldn't wind up being dragged, "Would you slow down?"
Again, the thing with the commas. I'm not sure for the first conversation bit, but...
"Oh, sorry." Einn slowed down enough that Cyan could keep pace with [him], refusing to let go of the hand clasped in his own.
Missing a "him" there.
"Where are [we]headed?" Cyan asked.
"we" this time.
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I'm amazed, babe, amazed. o_o;; You have a LOT of stamina. (And I can see you got tired the more you wrote, but wow, you did really well you know. o_o;; Even nitpicky-me couldn't find VERY much to correct.)
And EEEEEEE, Cyan and Einn are together again! *melts* THEY ARE SO CUTE. <3
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Date: 2004-11-22 05:27 pm (UTC)Eh. My record is 27 pages in a day, and that meets this - I thought it would be forty but I got lazy so it didn't quite meet that.
They really are cute. I hadn't planned on them being so adorable (I hadn't planned on them being the focus either, eheh) but I like how it worked out.
Now I just need to figure out how to wrap things up. I may harass you later to help me work things out in my head. *loves*
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Date: 2004-11-22 10:50 pm (UTC)They're so fangirly-squee-inducing type cute. :P It's great.
*pat* No problem. We might have to do it in email though. Stupid school. *grumbles*
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Date: 2004-11-22 03:45 pm (UTC)I can see things reaching a peak, and I'm almost sad that it is happening. This story has been so good. And I almost cheered out loud when Cyan belted Jade, bloodthirsty little demon that I am. ^__^
There are only two things that I wonder about. The first is where Einn says "I'm Fornarian - sensors don't read levels as low as mine" you don't explain what sort of levels they are. (unless I missed it somewhere in a previous chapter?) I am assuming life levels, but did you mean heat levels?
The second was that Einn mentioned Karmikel by name, but Cyan didn't ask who this "Karmikel" was. Since he'd been on the Dragonfly for so long, one would think that he'd at least have heard everyones name by that point.
Otherwise much, much love for you and this wonderful story!
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Date: 2004-11-22 04:06 pm (UTC)Heh. I'm kinda surprised myself. I'm scrambling now to see how I can wrap things up neatly - it's sort of overwhelming. I've only ever finished one other long story.
Heat levels is mostly what I meant. I shall clarify.
And it's funny - I think I did have something, then erased it to fix something and forgot to put it back in. *scribbles note*
^_^ Glad it was good otherwise.
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Date: 2004-11-22 05:55 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2004-11-22 05:56 pm (UTC)Heh.
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Date: 2004-11-22 11:37 pm (UTC)Dude, what a way to make my Monday. ^___^
I love, love, love the Brilliant. The coolest ship ever. (Er, and as mean and nasty and scummy as Jade is, I still really
kinda like him and think he's hotthink he's cool.*pinches Pytor's cheeks because he's cool* (Although, out of curiosity, was there a reason his name was getting spelled two different ways?) *glomps Faller*
I love the way you wrote the politics, and I'm in total awe of your writing and plotting abilities. You just rock, and I love, love, love this story. *glomps* And I love, love Cyan and Einn together. <<33!!! They are so damned cute!! *glomps them*
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Date: 2004-11-22 11:57 pm (UTC)Although, out of curiosity, was there a reason his name was getting spelled two different ways?)
Do you mean the "Petya" or the fact that I can't seem to make up mind about spellng 'Pytor' or 'Pyotr'? B/c if it's the former, 'Petya' is the diminutive of Pyotr - the cutsey nickname form of it (I have something of an obsession for russian names, it's kinda sad). If it's the former - that'll take a bit more to explain.
I love the way you wrote the politics, and I'm in total awe of your writing and plotting abilities.
See, now I'm *really* paranoid about fudging the ending. XP.
*loves* ^_^
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Date: 2004-11-23 01:35 am (UTC)Cyan + Einn ::insert giddy fangirlishness happiness and squeals::
i was also a little confused on the whole levels thing, but it might also have been me >.>
is it just me, but i swear your conversations between characters keeps getting better and better ^___^
::snoggles::