Can't win for losing this week
Aug. 31st, 2006 07:10 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
maderrHi Megan,
You've got a great story concept here, but it's not quite what we'relooking for. I felt in reading it that it could have been shortenedconsiderably--the main thing that struck me about it was most of thebackstory about Elton and Lana comes at a point in the story where itmakes the narrative lag. If this were condensed and moved to thebeginning of the story, it would improve the flow of the narrative. Thanks for the submission, and I wish you the best of luck in yourwriting endeavors!
~Kellie, Iris Print
Now just to wait for them to turn down Sandstorm
One day I'll be the person that succeeds, instead of being the one who watches everyone else succeed.
I'm just sulking. I'll be over it by tomorrow.
You've got a great story concept here, but it's not quite what we'relooking for. I felt in reading it that it could have been shortenedconsiderably--the main thing that struck me about it was most of thebackstory about Elton and Lana comes at a point in the story where itmakes the narrative lag. If this were condensed and moved to thebeginning of the story, it would improve the flow of the narrative. Thanks for the submission, and I wish you the best of luck in yourwriting endeavors!
~Kellie, Iris Print
Now just to wait for them to turn down Sandstorm
One day I'll be the person that succeeds, instead of being the one who watches everyone else succeed.
I'm just sulking. I'll be over it by tomorrow.
